Oh! I was so immersed in the story that I hadn't realised I already reached the end of the demo. Nooooo! But it DOES leave me hungry for future updates though!
This is a great game so far. A few spelling errors, but hey, that’s to be expected. You got a great framework here to make something spectacular. Can’t wait to see how you use it.
Also, prophecy is lame. Ima do my own thing. Even if I gotta beat some deity in a fistfight to do it.
I like this, I really do look forward to more but idk...the choices are restricting, not much flavor or variety in-between them; makes me wonder what the range of personality traits will be (it's only Chapter 2; the personality page hasn't been unlocked yet- so hopefully we'll get more option as the story goes on).
But yeah, this random stranger just grabs MC and pulls at his hoodie to see his neck and MC...just....allows?? Uh yeah, don't like that. At least one option should've been for us to try and pull away, fight, flinch, SOMETHING. It especially doesn't make sense for those of us who had chosen to be rude when bumping into Mars: you'd think we'd go on to be more stubborn or offended by his lack of personal space. Instead MC is not really reacting to being yanked around, no hesitation or nothing. (Again it's only chapter 2 so I could be speaking too soon)
This brings me to pacing, it's okay but we got no chance to really build up any suspense BECAUSE of the fact Mars starts manhandling us and pulling us into his group so quickly, then it ended just as fast.
I really enjoyed your story until the stranger appeared and just touched the MC (the collar of their shirt) and the MC followed him without any resistance (following a stranger into a storage room where he could've done, god knows what, to them) triggered me, especially since I couldn't do/choose anything and just had to bear it. I couldn't continue reading after this. I sincerely wish you and your story all the best, because it does sound like an awesome story, but unfortunately I won't be able to read it, i'm sorry :/ . Nevertheless, keep going you've got talent :D
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Actually, I personally think it could be wonderful if the Grim could be one of the RO :) Love the story!
Finally was able to finish the update, loved it! Can't wait for more!
When will the next chapter be out? I enjoyed playing this game very much !!
Oh! I was so immersed in the story that I hadn't realised I already reached the end of the demo. Nooooo! But it DOES leave me hungry for future updates though!
This is a great game so far. A few spelling errors, but hey, that’s to be expected. You got a great framework here to make something spectacular. Can’t wait to see how you use it.
Also, prophecy is lame. Ima do my own thing. Even if I gotta beat some deity in a fistfight to do it.
Really enjoyed the update!
I like this, I really do look forward to more but idk...the choices are restricting, not much flavor or variety in-between them; makes me wonder what the range of personality traits will be (it's only Chapter 2; the personality page hasn't been unlocked yet- so hopefully we'll get more option as the story goes on).
But yeah, this random stranger just grabs MC and pulls at his hoodie to see his neck and MC...just....allows?? Uh yeah, don't like that. At least one option should've been for us to try and pull away, fight, flinch, SOMETHING. It especially doesn't make sense for those of us who had chosen to be rude when bumping into Mars: you'd think we'd go on to be more stubborn or offended by his lack of personal space. Instead MC is not really reacting to being yanked around, no hesitation or nothing. (Again it's only chapter 2 so I could be speaking too soon)
This brings me to pacing, it's okay but we got no chance to really build up any suspense BECAUSE of the fact Mars starts manhandling us and pulling us into his group so quickly, then it ended just as fast.
So happy about the update!! ❤️
Iloveittt :'')
I really enjoyed your story until the stranger appeared and just touched the MC (the collar of their shirt) and the MC followed him without any resistance (following a stranger into a storage room where he could've done, god knows what, to them) triggered me, especially since I couldn't do/choose anything and just had to bear it. I couldn't continue reading after this.
I sincerely wish you and your story all the best, because it does sound like an awesome story, but unfortunately I won't be able to read it, i'm sorry :/ . Nevertheless, keep going you've got talent :D
Goddamn tht prologue was dramatic af lol i loved it!!! Well done excited for more ♥️😇
Also the "run into death" and "restore into death" is cute when loading the game. So unique
Thank you!
I wanted to try something new with the "Run"; something that correlated with the game. I appreciate you for noticing! :)
Ooooh I love it !!
that was so cool!
intriguing opening to the story. Hyped to learn more about Grim!
Eagerly awaiting future chapters! This is so good 👍
Ohh this is interesting. Can't wait for more of this. 🙏🥰
I loved it🩷🩷🩷🩷
i love history💕
Really enjoyed this!!! Can't wait for more.
This has got me hooked now. Looking forward to the next update!
I really like it! I'll defiantly wait for this story progress.
Love it